From editorial notes given to Milo Yiannopoulos, a leader of the “alt-right,” by Mitchell Ivers, a vice president at Simon & Schuster, on his manuscript for Dangerous. Last year, Simon & Schuster canceled Yiannopoulos’s book deal; he sued for breach of contract. Ivers’s notes were submitted in December to a New York state court.
This is a lazy way to begin a manifesto.
Careful that the egotistical boasting your young audience finds humorous doesn’t make you seem juvenile to other readers.
You use the phrase “bathe in the tears of my enemy” on page 232.
These points are stronger without…